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Page 12
12.1 Eliza looking at Jack. (AN: They’re on a boat crossing over the middle of an elvan lake for those of you who are reading this on the blog!)
ELIZA:
He just...
12.2 Eliza biting her lip, looking
away.
ELIZA:
It wasn’t anything important.
12.3 Jack looking at her, rowing
the boat.
JACK:
You sure about that?
12.4 Eliza putting her hand in the
water playfully. Not looking
up at Jack.
ELIZA:
Yes.
12.5 From the point of view of
something under the water.
The boat at the top of the
water/Eliza’s finger in it.
RILEY:
I wouldn’t do that. Something
might have ya finger off.
12.6 Eliza looking at him. ELIZA:
But we’re just in a lake?
Page 13
13.1 Riley handing her some food. RILEY:
Things are different here.
13.2 Eliza looking down at the
food.
ELIZA:
I’d guessed.
13.3 A sea monster, with giant legs like an octopus,
popping it’s antennas out
of the water, watching the
Boat.
13.4 The sea monster behind Riley,
looming up over the boat.
13.5 Jack looking at it wide eyed. JACK:
Get down!
Panel Description Dialog
Page 14
14.1 The sea monster whipping
Riley’s face. (Blood going
everywhere. (?))
14.2 Riley looking over his
shoulder. The sea monster
going under the water again.
RILEY:
See this is exactly why you don’t
put ya finger in there!
14.3 Eliza looking at Rileys cheek.
Riley putting a cloth on it.
ELIZA:
Are you alright?
RILEY:
I’ll live.
14.4 Jack looking in the water. JACK:
It’s disappeared.
14.5 Eliza standing in the boat,
looking down on the water.
ELIZA:
Yes. But I don’t think it’s gone
far.
Page 15
15.1 The water starting to bubble
next to the boat.
15.2 Riley throwing a sword to
Eliza.
RILEY:
Good time to practice don’t ya
think?
15.3 Eliza holding the sword. Riley
getting his gun out.
ELIZA:
What about Jack?
15.4 Riley picking a bag up. RILEY:
Oh don’t ya worry about that.
15.5 Riley walking to the other
side of the boat, giving Jack
a wooden spoon.
RILEY:
This will help him.
15.6 Jack looking at the spoon,
annoyed?
Page 16
16.1 Jack, Eliza, and Riley huddled
together in the middle of the
boat.
ELIZA:
Are you sure it’s coming back?
16.2 Riley looking at the water. RILEY
Most definetly.
16.3 Eliza looking in the water.
Jack holding onto her arm
gently. Riley looking down
the other side.
ELIZA:
Well it’s taking it’s time!
16.4 The sea monster lumbering up.
Eliza looking in the wrong
direction.
ELIZA:
You’d have thought it would
have...
16.5 A tentacle swiping over the
boat, hitting Jack and Riley.
Eliza falling into the boat.
Page 17
17.1 Eliza getting up from the
floor of the boat.
17.2 Eliza leaning over the side
of the boat, looking for the
others.
ELIZA:
Jack?! Riley?!
17.3 Eliza standing in the boat,
panicked. The boat completely
empty apart from her and the
sword.
ELIZA:
Where are you?!
17.4 Cu on Eliza’s face hearing a
noise in the background from
the sea monster.
17.5 The sea monsters tentacles
coming around the boat.
Page 18
18.1 Eliza looking at the Tentacle
nervously, it’s sitting
dangerously close to her.
18.2 Eliza biting her lip.
18.3 Eliza bringing the sword she
was holding up into the air.
18.4 Eliza whizzing the sword down
onto the tentacle wrapped
around the boat.
18.5 Eliza getting splattered with
blood, the octopus falling
back into the water.
18.6 Eliza standing in the middle
of the boat, that was now
partially broken boat.
Everything still, tense and
misty.
Page 19
19.1 Eliza looking round,
everything still silent.
ELIZA:
Jack?! Riley?!
19.2 A splash of water hitting
Eliza in the cheek.
19.3 Riley on the edge of the boat,
Eliza jumping.
19.4 Eliza running over to him. ELIZA:
Riley?! Are you alright?
19.5 Eliza’s eyes widening
slightly.
19.6 A tentacle wrapped around
Rileys arm.
Page 20
20.1 Riley gripping onto the boat
with one arm.
RILEY:
Help!
20.2 Eliza running over to him. ELIZA:
I’ll cut it’s tentacle off again!
20.3 Riley looking up at her. RILEY:
You can’t! My arms there!
20.4 Eliza trying to pull him back
onto the boat.
ELIZA:
Alright I’ll pull you up then!
Where’s Jack?
20.5 Riley getting dragged back
into the water.
20.6 Eliza holding onto his hand,
trying to keep him up.
Page 21
21.1 Riley getting pulled under.
21.2 Eliza reaching out to get him. ELIZA:
No!
21.3 Eliza leaning over the boat to
look for him.
ELIZA:
Riley?!
21.4 Another tentacle coming out
of the water at the end of the
boat.
21.5 Eliza looking over her
shoulder hearing it.
21.6 The tentacle smashing the boat
to pieces.
Page 22
22.1 The lake, completely still.
The boat now smashed up and
floating in the middle of the
lake. (Large bubbles coming
up from where the sea monster
had gone down?) Eliza, Jack
and Riley no where to be seen.
Everything quiet.
22.2 Riley and Eliza swimming up
out of the water.
22.3 Eliza coughing, Riley
beginning to pull her to the
shore.
22.4 Riley helping her out of the
water.
22.5 Eliza pulling him out.
22.6 Riley coughing slightly,
looking up at her.
RILEY:
I had a great tentacle around my
arm and you asked about whether
I’d seen Mr Handsome?!
Page 23
23.1 Eliza annoyed looking at him. ELIZA:
That’s not funny!
23.2 Eliza looking at the water
anxiously.
ELIZA:
Where is he?
23.3 Jack coming up out of the
water, next to where they were
standing.
23.4 Eliza reaching down to him
immediately.
ELIZA:
Jack!
23.5 Eliza helping him out. ELIZA:
Where the hell did you go?!
23.6 Eliza holding onto Jacks
shoulders gently, looking up
at Riley.
ELIZA:
We need to make camp. Now.
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